The dark chocolate echoing of dusk
resounds
against the Ferris Wheel
overlooking the fairgrounds
That bittersweet evening
Is on my lips
And the errant air
Tastes like apple-crisps
Though cotton-candy conversation parched,
as if by design
Your hands are water
And your lips wine
Photo by Stanislav Ferrao on Unsplash
At DVerse today, the prompt is to write a Quadrille poem consisting of 44 words exactly (not including the title) in response to the challenge. The word today is ‘Fair’ and it must be used in some form within your poem.
Seamus O'Shaughnessy, Jr. 
I love the way this ends- beautiful!
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thank you!
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You’re welcome.
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I like the use of the food & beverage imagery. It makes the poem come alive through all the senses
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Wish I could have made it longer. The quadrille + sensory depth is a difficult compromise!!
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Beautiful. Without being too analytical, your 2nd stanza is pure diamond
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Love the word play – dark chocolate echoing of dusk, apple-crisp air and cotton-candy conversations. Nicely done.
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Thank you~!
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Sensual imagery of food, fair and lost love works beautifully to take the persona back in time. Wonderful poetry.
pax,
dora
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Thank you! I feel like the only food I missed was popcorn, but its hard to make that sensual haha
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A gorgeous chocolate night at the fair! Such great metaphors.
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
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Beautifully written ❤ Such wonderful metaphors!
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Thank you!
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such sexy, tasty imagery, Seamus!
❤
David
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I like your rhymes. They’re very effective.
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Thank you!
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Such sensual imagery. The bittersweet makes me think that though it may have been a night to remember, things didn’t work out. But fairs are impermanent too.
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Cotton-candy conversation…. sounds just wonderful
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Delightful indeed!
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You’re so sensual.
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I’ve been accused of worse things 🙂
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I can’t wait to accuse you of much more.
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